"It seemed we were the world
Those days are gone
And all that’s left are these indigo dreams
Sown together by strings of memory
And beads of hope"
FAVOURTIE BIT

The smooth, easy rhythm and flow of this made it so easy for me to harmonise a melody with it. It's deep and soulfully written with fitting methaphors that exemplify the beautiful melancholy (yes i do love using that word hehe) of this song. It's honest and real and gets you thinking, which shows how good it is!

I can see this working so so well on acoustic guitar, colbie caillat-style or even with kate nash's snazzy piano grooves; heck you could even go all out imogen heap on this one!

this is a delicious tune me girl, love it! whoa oh oh,
whoa oh oh..ooh la!


I think maybe you could've added two more lines to round off "The thread tattered/The beads cold and hard" to give it a more completed rhythm before going back to indigo? just a thought.

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my long curls shine violet
my eyes are dark chocolate
my lips are a cupid's bow
raspberry smile hides a secret i know

wow, thats really good! u can deff feel that someone is singing it
i think u should go record urself singing it lol

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do you have club card? is it the stampy one or the scaner one? does anyone have the emo cutting device?

ooo thanks hun. and i hope to eventually get a tune for it.
thanks for the encouragement

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Lets Put A Smile On That Face!

Seriously that is my fav line too!!! whoooot great minds think alike.

melancholy is a great word and so defines this song. and i am glad you find it honest because you know i wrote this one for a reason and it is like my most secret feelings are put in words with this one, it is one of those soulful songs that i wrote a little while back and it was one filled with tears and sorrow. so i am glad you said that

it would work really well on acoustic guitar (which i have) and i was thinking slow drally piano verging on memory. and Imgogen Heap is the greatest Compliment to me, because she would be someone i would love my style to project, she tells vivid stories in her lyrics, and even through the sound of the music! so i love it.

and i hope you show me this tune thatyou have in yer head. when i first thought of this song i thought deffinitely ballad. but if you get what i mean by memories lost, like an errie feel to it and what not. (do you get what i mean)

And you know i think maybe a couple more lines would enhance it. and i like those lines you said they are perfect.. i think now it is ended. LOVES YOU!!!

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Lets Put A Smile On That Face!

i love you too!!! just a random pop of ppl in ma head..natalie merchant, roisin murphy, tom waits, joshua raden, edith piaf, mazzy star, rusted root, portishead, sigur ros,

im not saying that they necessarily have the sound you're looking for but perhaps they can give you ideas about how you want to develop your sound? hope it helps

chillipepper

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my long curls shine violet
my eyes are dark chocolate
my lips are a cupid's bow
raspberry smile hides a secret i know